Matt Hobbs

Prof. Emerson

10/19/2017

ENG 110 C

 

Prompt #2 Revision Plan

I believe that I have a very noticeable flaw in my essay. I clearly need to elaborate on my last couple of paragraphs. Another goal I have is to keep tying my paragraphs back to my thesis. After being told, I noticed that I rarely make that connection. This lack of connection may cause confusion. The reader might be thinking why I added this paragraph or how it relates to the topic. If I make that connection it will help the reader understand my reasoning for adding that thought or argument. A peer gave me some advice to help solve this problem. I have an important word in my thesis which is “dangerous”. She told me to use synonyms for “dangerous” and add those to each paragraph to tie my main idea to that paragraph. Another challenge I can see when finishing my paper is rushing. I really need to take the time and thoughtfully write my ideas and proofread my writing multiple times. I think the proofreading and going over my essay is very important. By taking the time and not rushing I believe i can actually get all of my thoughts on paper. When you rush you often leaves some great thoughts or ideas behind. One way to go about this is just organizing myself. I need to prioritize my time.